Got bored and wrote this

Leave your opinions please.

The dark night of a loved ones death
memories of them stole my breath
tear drops come from ones own eye
to hit the ground when loved ones die
face the demons in my mind
emotionally crucified
by my own means of selfishness
I pray for them, eternal bliss
to see them smile to see them cry
is no more when loved ones die
extinguished is the spark of life
twas extinguished with a knife
the blade ran cold upon the skin
this hard feeling of deadly sin
to much to bare to much to hold
to break the souls physical mold
life is just one great big lie
but 'tis no more when loved ones die
for there soul to be released
only hope for them, theres peace
to know that we will never play
never, not another day.
to seem them laugh to seem them cry
is no more when loved ones die

are our video games arr our kade?

fold twiweight lightly

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Originally Posted by Greenport

Leave your opinions please.

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Awesome stuff Greenport, believe it or not I was going to start a poetry thread but now you could get one going for all us budding poets:)
Nobody says you have to be brilliant but there is supposed to be a poet in us all so why not give it a go.

Cheers
NCM

please leave your poetry if you got any :)

Where do we go when we die
Is it true we reincarnate or, do our souls fly
Only then to disappear into thin air and appear again as the glare of a star in the sky
Do we become fast food for the maggots ?
Or are we supplied with angel wings to fly and provide guidance?
Or are we aligned outside the pearly gates to await the most highest of judgments?
I wanna know
Is there a place called heaven, a place called hell?
Or a place called limbo, a place for lost souls who do remain ghosts?
And if so whatâ??s our J O B
For crossing over to rocking the haloâ??s maybe
Angles donâ??t exist
Maybe my angles donâ??t exist
Would you consider me devilish imagine if
Earthâ??s as good as it gets
The only sure thing is death.

let love in

lol nice poem at least this one made sense lol

http://www.angelfire.com/vamp/livinghell/poetry.html

im not a poetry fan, but i can respect it.

just like baseball.

no more poetry? :(

Its not a poem its lyrics to a track i made when one of my old friends died.

So many things your neva get to see
like ya first true love or celbrating ya 16th
i miss ya you meant allot to me
known ya most of ma life now im saying r.i.p

when i found out the news i shed sum tears
even tho i aint seen much of ya these past few years
mace your gone but your never 4gotten
n i say this from ma heart at the bottom

your in a better place now we all know thats true
but it still aint gona stop us missing you
heavens newest soljah marching through
i look up at the stars n i think of you

i cant bear to think what ya mums going through
laying in bed knowsing shes lost you
the good die young yea that must be true
they wanted to make sure heaven had space for you


i remember when i found out cancer hit
i was like rah cause truesay u was only in year 6
but its now your gona realtys really hit
this is a fucked up world full of unfair shit

now your looking down on us all
its not fair but your in a better place than us all
you can clearly see your still loved by us all
so rip mason keep it cool


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