bentleygtgirl
01-05-2007, 05:17 AM
Hi all,
So i am writing this letter to the president & finaid office of my school, I Was hoping u all would read it and would tell me what u think. I'm trying to get more moeny for school and if there are any errors or anything u would add or if you could please tell me if its good or bad or flows well i would APPRECIATE IT! and i took out some details to keep me anonymous, they are XXXXed out
Dear Dr. XXX,
I am currently a junior here at XXX. I am a member of XXX and the XXX. I have participated in alumni gift phonathons for the school and work-studied for the XXX Office. I also ran on the Cross Country team this past season. I am a Business Administration major and I maintain a 3.0 GPA. I transferred here as a sophomore after attending the XXX in my hometown of XXX. I have been receiving an exemplary education at this fine institution and I know I made the right choice to continue my education here. I have always dreamt of attending a private college as they are very prestigious and provide the staff and education that most public schools canā??t. I never thought I actually would attend one because public school is all I thought I could afford, but after doing research I realized the degree is worth it. It has been difficult for me to finance my education and by the time I graduate I will have accumulated nearly sixty-thousand dollars in debt. The debts are being paid by me, as my mother can not afford them. I currently receive eight thousand dollars of financial aid to this school. I know that a degree from this school will someday pay for itself, but the amount of debt I am in is overwhelming.
I have looked at several scholarships but many of them for this school require a XXX residency. Several of my friends who have a lower GPA than me or who are much less involved on campus receive much more aid through programs such as XXX Futures or the XXX Scholarship, which I am not eligible for only because I am not a resident of this state. I was also a transfer student so scholarships awarded to high school seniors or incoming freshmen were not available to me. It was a leap of faith and a difficult decision for me to move from XXX to XXX. My mother knew that she could not afford my education so she never pushed me attend college. The decision to go to college was my own. I did all the school research and put in applications myself as my mother were not familiar with the process. I have no family in XXX and moved on my own without knowing anyone. Knowing people from the same region or state that you are from can help make the transition easier, but there are few students from the Midwest attending XXX. I only know of one other student from XXX. I have applied for several other scholarships that I researched at EducationQuest but I have not received any.
My mother is single and my sole supporter. The tuition of this school with my aid comes to approximately twenty-thousand dollars per year and my motherā??s salary is only slightly over thirty-five thousand dollars. She will be 60 years old this year and is only a few years from retirement. Even though her job causes her a lot of pain, she is not on disability pay and never takes off work. She has years of perfect attendance at XXX, a factory where she works using manual labor to create XXX ATVs. I worked there this summer full-time to pay for out-of-pocket expenses for school. I realized the job is very hard; it is extremely loud, dirty and hot. Many people I worked with didnā??t go to college for different reasons and this job made me appreciate my education because I know that I do not want to become a laborer. My mother is excellent with her finances and always pays her bills on time. She never had the opportunity to go to college. She has already raised X children, my half brothers and sisters who are all married and on their own. Recently, she was diagnosed with retinal occlusion. This means she had a stroke behind her left eye which resulted in most of her vision being lost in that eye. She still goes to work every day to pay her bills and does not receive any assistance.
I take after my mother and have always been a hard worker. When I was younger, if I wanted to go to summer camps or on school trips, I would have to earn my way. I would sell candy, cookies, and POGO cards, organize car washes and garage sales along with many other fundraisers so I could go on these trips as my parents couldnā??t afford them. Iā??ve always tried to be independent and have earned money since I was very young which is why being business major is a natural choice for me. When I was 6 years old I worked with my mother delivering a newspaper around town. I started to work on my own when I was 15. My first job was detasseling, which is hard farm work where the tassel of the corn is pulled off. I have also worked in a factory, in restaurants, in retail and also doing phone work. I have never been without a job for very long because I pay for most of my own expenses. I am thankful that I earn my own money because it gives me good work ethic, financial skills and taught me to be independent.
Being independent, my biggest fear is not being able to pay my own bills when I graduate. I can not depend on my mother as money is tight with her new medical condition and that she is near retirement. I have always pushed myself to achieve the very best. I have always had a 3.0 GPA or higher and have always been involved with my school as I have a lot of pride in wherever I am. What I am asking of you, Dr. XXX, is to personally review my financial aid package. If there are any scholarships you could recommend to me or any way you could help me financially it would be truly appreciated. Waiving the XXX residency requirement for a scholarship could help me greatly. I do plan on staying in XXX after I graduate. I have called alumni during school phonathons and asked them to give financial gifts, now I hope that you can help me in the form of financial aid. I appreciate you taking time out of your day to read this letter and I hope to hear from you soon.
THANK YOU CANNABIS.COM members for reading! I appreciate it. :rastasmoke: :rastasmoke: :D
So i am writing this letter to the president & finaid office of my school, I Was hoping u all would read it and would tell me what u think. I'm trying to get more moeny for school and if there are any errors or anything u would add or if you could please tell me if its good or bad or flows well i would APPRECIATE IT! and i took out some details to keep me anonymous, they are XXXXed out
Dear Dr. XXX,
I am currently a junior here at XXX. I am a member of XXX and the XXX. I have participated in alumni gift phonathons for the school and work-studied for the XXX Office. I also ran on the Cross Country team this past season. I am a Business Administration major and I maintain a 3.0 GPA. I transferred here as a sophomore after attending the XXX in my hometown of XXX. I have been receiving an exemplary education at this fine institution and I know I made the right choice to continue my education here. I have always dreamt of attending a private college as they are very prestigious and provide the staff and education that most public schools canā??t. I never thought I actually would attend one because public school is all I thought I could afford, but after doing research I realized the degree is worth it. It has been difficult for me to finance my education and by the time I graduate I will have accumulated nearly sixty-thousand dollars in debt. The debts are being paid by me, as my mother can not afford them. I currently receive eight thousand dollars of financial aid to this school. I know that a degree from this school will someday pay for itself, but the amount of debt I am in is overwhelming.
I have looked at several scholarships but many of them for this school require a XXX residency. Several of my friends who have a lower GPA than me or who are much less involved on campus receive much more aid through programs such as XXX Futures or the XXX Scholarship, which I am not eligible for only because I am not a resident of this state. I was also a transfer student so scholarships awarded to high school seniors or incoming freshmen were not available to me. It was a leap of faith and a difficult decision for me to move from XXX to XXX. My mother knew that she could not afford my education so she never pushed me attend college. The decision to go to college was my own. I did all the school research and put in applications myself as my mother were not familiar with the process. I have no family in XXX and moved on my own without knowing anyone. Knowing people from the same region or state that you are from can help make the transition easier, but there are few students from the Midwest attending XXX. I only know of one other student from XXX. I have applied for several other scholarships that I researched at EducationQuest but I have not received any.
My mother is single and my sole supporter. The tuition of this school with my aid comes to approximately twenty-thousand dollars per year and my motherā??s salary is only slightly over thirty-five thousand dollars. She will be 60 years old this year and is only a few years from retirement. Even though her job causes her a lot of pain, she is not on disability pay and never takes off work. She has years of perfect attendance at XXX, a factory where she works using manual labor to create XXX ATVs. I worked there this summer full-time to pay for out-of-pocket expenses for school. I realized the job is very hard; it is extremely loud, dirty and hot. Many people I worked with didnā??t go to college for different reasons and this job made me appreciate my education because I know that I do not want to become a laborer. My mother is excellent with her finances and always pays her bills on time. She never had the opportunity to go to college. She has already raised X children, my half brothers and sisters who are all married and on their own. Recently, she was diagnosed with retinal occlusion. This means she had a stroke behind her left eye which resulted in most of her vision being lost in that eye. She still goes to work every day to pay her bills and does not receive any assistance.
I take after my mother and have always been a hard worker. When I was younger, if I wanted to go to summer camps or on school trips, I would have to earn my way. I would sell candy, cookies, and POGO cards, organize car washes and garage sales along with many other fundraisers so I could go on these trips as my parents couldnā??t afford them. Iā??ve always tried to be independent and have earned money since I was very young which is why being business major is a natural choice for me. When I was 6 years old I worked with my mother delivering a newspaper around town. I started to work on my own when I was 15. My first job was detasseling, which is hard farm work where the tassel of the corn is pulled off. I have also worked in a factory, in restaurants, in retail and also doing phone work. I have never been without a job for very long because I pay for most of my own expenses. I am thankful that I earn my own money because it gives me good work ethic, financial skills and taught me to be independent.
Being independent, my biggest fear is not being able to pay my own bills when I graduate. I can not depend on my mother as money is tight with her new medical condition and that she is near retirement. I have always pushed myself to achieve the very best. I have always had a 3.0 GPA or higher and have always been involved with my school as I have a lot of pride in wherever I am. What I am asking of you, Dr. XXX, is to personally review my financial aid package. If there are any scholarships you could recommend to me or any way you could help me financially it would be truly appreciated. Waiving the XXX residency requirement for a scholarship could help me greatly. I do plan on staying in XXX after I graduate. I have called alumni during school phonathons and asked them to give financial gifts, now I hope that you can help me in the form of financial aid. I appreciate you taking time out of your day to read this letter and I hope to hear from you soon.
THANK YOU CANNABIS.COM members for reading! I appreciate it. :rastasmoke: :rastasmoke: :D