I didn't mean to criticize your criticism (tee hee), I'm just explaining that part of it. I know its long and drawn out, too, but I had to show my background, how I deal with it, and what I've become. Anywho, The best literary advice ever given to me was to give absolutely everything in a story some nuanced meaning that adds to the rest of it. I just have trouble giving those ties substance. Either way, I've already re-written it, and it was in need of repair. I love to talk about it too. If I post another story some time, I'll actually read through it once beforehand.
zarathustra Reviewed by zarathustra on . Looking for story feedback... I'd appreciate feedback on this. I know it's long, but anything would be a great help! The Ride Home Half day left, and seven cigarettes. Iā??ve never smoked so frequently before; does he get to me that much? Why the hell did I ask to go back for such a goddamned stupid reason? I donā??t give a ratā??s ass about politics, but I need money. I could probably get enough from him to afford tobacco until thanksgiving, if I keep hold of some sort of budget. Let me see, Sunday dinners usually run Rating: 5