Quote Originally Posted by Nation_1ne
Thanks for the input, much appreciated. I think you could be right about the "attentively" thing.

I'm glad the story is "nice", I just hope you're being honest lol.

Anymore advice would be greatly appreciated.
Well I didn't really want to try and give a lot of input as writing is not really my expertise (sp?). The input I did give you though was just the thing that I noticed. I'd rather leave it for people who could give you much better input, like JaggedEdge.

And as for the "nice" part. Well I gave you the input, but forgot to tell you I liked the story. I had to leave so I decided to edit real quick and throw it in.

But yeah, I really liked it as it was short but sweet. I like how it ends, most things I end up reading don't have such an ending like that where a character says something that shows how much their relationship means to them. It's kind of like your ending sparks a feeling that we, as real people might rarely experience in real life. I don't know if that makes sense, but it seems like the best way to say it.

Anyways, keep writing. And I'd be happy to read more.
AR15 Reviewed by AR15 on . Some help please. Hey all, as some of you know I enjoy writing. But as I expressed in another thread my writing skills aren't all that great. The thing is, I have just written a short story and was wondering if you guys think it's any good. I'm open to any criticism, even if you feel the need to express how shit it is lol. So please, read it, and be honest. A couple sat together one night sharing thoughts. They had spoken about dreams quite attentively, the women had explained to her lover how she often Rating: 5