Umm, I don't know but I think in the second sentence, "attentively" might not be the word to use. I usually associate that with listening and not speaking. Maybe "passionately"? I don't know, it's your writing not mine so it's your choice. Good luck.

Oh and nice story btw.
AR15 Reviewed by AR15 on . Some help please. Hey all, as some of you know I enjoy writing. But as I expressed in another thread my writing skills aren't all that great. The thing is, I have just written a short story and was wondering if you guys think it's any good. I'm open to any criticism, even if you feel the need to express how shit it is lol. So please, read it, and be honest. A couple sat together one night sharing thoughts. They had spoken about dreams quite attentively, the women had explained to her lover how she often Rating: 5