Hey all, as some of you know I enjoy writing. But as I expressed in another thread my writing skills aren't all that great. The thing is, I have just written a short story and was wondering if you guys think it's any good. I'm open to any criticism, even if you feel the need to express how shit it is lol. So please, read it, and be honest.

A couple sat together one night sharing thoughts. They had spoken about dreams quite attentively, the women had explained to her lover how she often dreams about him.

Her eyes drift over to the floor, as she sighs and begins to stare. As subtle as it was the man could see something was obviously wrong. He sits with curiosity overwhelming him, reciting the same question "what could it be?". After a few minutes pass the man grows tired of the silence and nothing but the sound of his stomach churning. He asks "What is it, Why do you sit so silently?". A sad expression takes over her face, although happy being noticed. She brings her eyes up to her lovers, and they lock together intimately staring into each others souls. She plucks up the courage to ask the man a question, "Why is it you never dream she asks? I cannot understand. It just makes no sense, everybody dreams!". He laughs a little. "Well I'm glad you find this funny, because I find it ridiculous. " The man's laughter turns to an awkward silence as he continues to look deeply at his partner. He explains "dreams are an escape from reality, they are meant to be in a world where you are better off. Where you have love, intimacy, security, and no fears. I used to dream. Actually, i used to dream a lot. Mainly about finding my soul mate. But they stopped the day that I met you."


Thanks.
Nation_1ne Reviewed by Nation_1ne on . Some help please. Hey all, as some of you know I enjoy writing. But as I expressed in another thread my writing skills aren't all that great. The thing is, I have just written a short story and was wondering if you guys think it's any good. I'm open to any criticism, even if you feel the need to express how shit it is lol. So please, read it, and be honest. A couple sat together one night sharing thoughts. They had spoken about dreams quite attentively, the women had explained to her lover how she often Rating: 5