Short rap I wrote

[blazed620]

Ok so i like to write things, wether it be songs, raps, poetry, whatever. Well i was bored a second ago and wrote this short little rap, took me about 10 minutes. Just tell me what you think and critique it or whatever. And please ppl, DONT post YOUR songs, or raps

I get a sensation when I penetrate the teenage generation
It's insane when, I open her fuckin' mouth and fuck her fuckin' brains in
And I'm not changin, you better trust that
Infact, I'll blast your wack ass if your talkin that trash
Or I'll snag your stash and turn that green into some nasty ash
Smash the glass in your bachelor pad and watch me laugh
This jackass thinks this is all a joke
Just watch me toke as you see all your dreams go up in smoke

blazed620 Reviewed by blazed620 on 01-13-2007. Short rap I wrote Ok so i like to write things, wether it be songs, raps, poetry, whatever. Well i was bored a second ago and wrote this short little rap, took me about 10 minutes. Just tell me what you think and critique it or whatever. And please ppl, DONT post YOUR songs, or raps I get a sensation when I penetrate the teenage generation It's insane when, I open her fuckin' mouth and fuck her fuckin' brains in And I'm not changin, you better trust that Infact, I'll blast your wack ass if your talkin that Rating: 5

[Samwhore]

nice

[blazed620]

thanks

[MaryjaneAndHashley]

Ok so i like to write things, wether it be songs, raps, poetry, whatever. Well i was bored a second ago and wrote this short little rap, took me about 10 minutes. Just tell me what you think and critique it or whatever. And please ppl, DONT post YOUR songs, or raps

I get a sensation when I penetrate the teenage generation
It's insane when, I open her fuckin' mouth and fuck her fuckin' brains in
And I'm not changin, you better trust that
Infact, I'll blast your wack ass if your talkin that trash
Or I'll snag your stash and turn that green into some nasty ash
Smash the glass in your bachelor pad and watch me laugh
This jackass thinks this is all a joke
Just watch me toke as you see all your dreams go up in smoke

Sounds good, I luv ur avv

Giggity-Giggity-goo.
heh! heh! alllllllllllrite.

[PotHeed420]

if you want a good rap i'd suggest to write about something more meaningful and has an actual story behind it. wasn't bad though some lines were pretty straight but you gotta get a bigger vocabulary. i;d say the rap was pretty good though

[MastaChronic]

an enormous vocabulary is almost required to be a decent rapper

[kdspecial]

You better start rappin' not just typing.......

kd

[JeenYuss]

i can write better shit IN MY SLEEP

if i had to grade it i would call it some low grade mids

[JeenYuss]

someone should start a freestyle/keystyle thread i think some stoners can write good stuff & include songs and/or poetry too not just rap

[partyguy420]

has anyone done that yet?
heres the beging of a song i started freestyiling....

i got a 40 O.Z. of Olde E
it makes my life go E.Z.
i smoke 2 joints with Jay Z
You better pay me..

(i dont think ill quite my day job to become a rapper)