If you school is so small, why don't you just go talk to this person?

My sister went to Yale and fought for the new finaid rules they have now. If your parent(s) make under 40k combined, you have a free ride. Can i ask what school this is? Also, as far as your letter is concerned, it is ENTIRELY too long. Cut it in half.

Coming from an Ivy League family, i never understood the importance of such a lavish and expensive education. The president of my school is now the Secretary of Defense.
ValkyrieAg Reviewed by ValkyrieAg on . PLZ read i need help on letter Hi all, So i am writing this letter to the president & finaid office of my school, I Was hoping u all would read it and would tell me what u think. I'm trying to get more moeny for school and if there are any errors or anything u would add or if you could please tell me if its good or bad or flows well i would APPRECIATE IT! and i took out some details to keep me anonymous, they are XXXXed out Dear Dr. XXX, I am currently a junior here at XXX. I am a member of XXX and the XXX. I have Rating: 5