It's a very good, very strong letter, Dejayou. I'm a former professional writer, and I know good communications when I see them. This definitely qualifies. I'm glad you're writing it because you're making all the important points the head of your company needs to hear. You realize, of course, that he may not choose to hear what you're saying or believe you, but at least you will have said it.

A couple of suggestions. Can you shorten/tighten it at all? I say that because "less is more" in persuasive writing, generally. Also, executives and company chieftains tend to be busy types who don't have a lot of time for reading. You'll be more likely to hit your mark if you're as succinct as possible.

Also, if you want to be real persuasive, you might include, oh, three or four key links about cannabis benefits and the fact that cannabis is more benign than other drugs. You'll have to look for these, but I know they exist. Ideally, those links should come from a marijuana-neutral source like a news site or a mainstream medical institution rather than a pro-cannabis site, which would be automatically assumed to be biased in favor of weed.

http://www.norml.org/index.cfm?Group_ID=3375 (A NORML link about personal use, which includes further links to good info. Scroll down and read the links under Facts.)
http://www.erowid.org/plants/cannabis/cannabis.shtml (Erowid link to cannabis info. This is a potentially tricky one. Erowid's very good about including both positive and negative info, but if you're trying to persuade someone, that negative info can stand out and work against you. See what you think.)

Several folks have recently posted some good video links here, too, and you might be able to use one of those as well. They were links that told the story of cananbis and explained the history behind its illegality. Those might be persuasive, too.

Good job! And good luck!
birdgirl73 Reviewed by birdgirl73 on . A Letter i wrote to the head of my company about Random drug testing Recently, my job decided to start randomly drug testing employees. I am sending this anonymously to the head of the company. I would like to hear people's thoughts and to see if it sounds alright. I put stars in place of my company's name, for security's sake: what do you guys think? Rating: 5