Results 1 to 10 of 20
Threaded View
-
10-15-2006, 12:45 AM #4Senior Member
rap i wrote
as the others have said...it's just your typical stoned rap song.
If you really want some constructive criticism, try to be more creative with your approach. Try to use more metaphors and up your vocabulary a bit. Multi's would be a good incorporation as well. Also, the whole "I'm horny and want to decribe sexual encounters with a trailer trash whore" theme just doesn't appeal to me. Granted, there are some good sexual rap songs, but many of the appealing ones incorporate the use of creative components that capture people's attention. That's the goal you should go for.
Not trying to get ya down or anything, just trying to give you some good pointers to go on.
Similar Threads
-
Another Paper I wrote
By filmfollower in forum ActivismReplies: 1Last Post: 01-01-2008, 10:50 PM -
A story that I wrote..
By NightProwler in forum StoriesReplies: 1Last Post: 08-06-2007, 05:26 AM -
Got bored and wrote this
By Greenport in forum GreenGrassForums LoungeReplies: 10Last Post: 06-05-2007, 11:31 AM -
Short rap I wrote
By blazed620 in forum Original MusicReplies: 30Last Post: 02-06-2007, 06:05 PM -
Just wrote this...
By Islander in forum GreenGrassForums LoungeReplies: 10Last Post: 09-09-2004, 06:26 PM