Before I start to critique I think it's only fair to just tell you a little bit about myself so you know where the criticism is coming from. I'm a college student and am close to getting my bachelors in English and Psychology (I have never gotten less than an A in any of my English classes in college). I do creative writing on my own, mostly poetry, pros and journaling. I had to read that over at least 4 times. The first time I honestly didn't like it and found it amateur. By my third time or so, I was able to see the effort you put into your writing style.
--At first I didn't like how you started with the female as faceless and then in the middle of it said the victim male was faceless also. It almost seemed like it was a slip and only one should have been. Now I see that she could have made him faceless. But why was she faceless and uknown to him and vice versa?
--The over generalizing really got to me. If you worked on this writing and developed a plot, and a greater depth to your narrator, the overgeneralizing and woman-hating theme may have been more understandable and less of a turn off.
--I think you should elaborate more on the Sympathy part. It seemed out of place and I don't connect it to the rest of your writing. Why did this woman desire sympathy, is that really the root of it all?
--This line: "Marx once said, 'Religion is the Opium of the masses'. For everyone else, there is love. If Marx was right, then love must be the heroin of the masses." That doesn't make sense and it seems you tried too damn hard to try to connect that Marx quote somehow to love. You're now saying there is either religion or love for people.

I agree with others who say you should pursue writing and you definetly have talent. The criticisms I made are all just my humble opinions and I hope you take them with an open mind and aren't offended. I didn't know what kind of responses you wanted from people since this is in a Sexuality Forum.
Good luck to you!