It's a smidge short for a full chapter, and you might not want to have it as the first. However you go on, you should make sure to explain more background than this has, though at this length it doesn't need it yet. One more thing, you might want to use 'he' or 'she' more, it helps with the flow. But that's just my opinion.

Fly high, lesbian seagull.
zarathustra Reviewed by zarathustra on . woddooyathink? (Well i havent slept, and im bored, so i decided to take a break from my current project and start something new.. here it is, chapter 1.. if its crap or there are any mistakes then let me know, i need constructive criticism.. oh and dont blame me if it IS crap, coz i only did this in the space of half an hour or so lol) Chapter 1 - The Beginning With her ear against the door she could hear male voices; some angry, others tired and fatigued. Running away from Emma like that was Rating: 5