Quote Originally Posted by Nochowderforyou
I'm not too sure on what to write next, but if this is for high school, they will be marking you on grammer as well

Now, "their" "there" and "they're"...

"their" means as in possession. Here is an example from your paragraph:
The very place students can get togeather and expand there horizons with the nectar of education
Expand their horizons.

"there" means a place.Bob and Jim went over there

"they're" Means They Are

Also, put a comma after horizons....expand their horizons, with the nectar of...

Next, this:
I think what I really meant was, a place where social status rules all and if your not up to date with there crappy, unaptness noise they actually call music...well your just a waste of life

I see YOUR, in your case though, it should say "you're", as in, you are. Also, the last sentence, after WELL, put a comma...well, you're just a waste of life

Teachers are crazy picky about grammer man, just trying to help.

Peace
I'm not turning a paper in, its like the script practically, so grammar is not a issue as of now.THanks though, I feel real bad after you corrected all of that.