Help?

[Awill3449]

I was just thinking about this and basically what you're missing is points. I know it sucks going back to square one, but it'll be worth it in the end. So your first point is your sick of taking shit for dressing differently. So basically high school kids are so damn insecure about how they look that they need to make fun of you because you dress how you want. There's point one.

So just right down the shit your sick of and turn it into a critizism of high schoolers as a whole. Since it's satire, make sure to tease and use overexaggerations

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Awill3449 Reviewed by Awill3449 on 01-25-2006. Help? If you don't remember I made a thread asking for help on writting a satiristic witty rant over high school for my short film I will be presenting to my high school video tech class.Heres what I have so far: High school, a place where a variety of teenagers can get togeather and learn in harmony regardless of there race,gender, or dress preference.The very place students can get togeather and expand there horizons with the nectar of education.Heh...you'd have to be a moron to beleive this.I Rating: 5

[VoidLivesOn]

HAHA you make it sound so easy man, but your the only person who gets my point on how I want to write this.YOU just get the picture.OK i'll see what I can think of and i'' post it here or write you an email.

[Awill3449]

It takes practice.

I'll take a look at it tomorrow.

[VoidLivesOn]

Do you have like a line or idea to start me off?

[VoidLivesOn]

BUMP

[beachguy in thongs]

The infested swirling orgy millions of germs, catching rides on the institutionalized synthetic jetstream, on hundreds of students and faculty, all.

I'm sorry, I don't know the question, anymore.

[Awill3449]

bump...you still need help?

[VoidLivesOn]

Yeah I was at school today.I was thinking about when you were saying going back to square one, were you implying on starting over?

And also I came up with another point today, nothing special but I feel the need that this subject has to be included somewhere.

Prepubescent high school relationships which are only products of extreme boredom.Not to mention there 2 week life spans.

Thats just a little something, I want to add more to it.

[Awill3449]

Haha thats good. And about square one, didn't mean starting over per se, just rethinking the points you were making and editing it so that its still funny and makes more interesting observations.

[VoidLivesOn]

Haha thats good. And about square one, didn't mean starting over per se, just rethinking the points you were making and editing it so that its still funny and makes more interesting observations.

Yeah I need to work on the high school relationship points because that would to be very essential to my rant.Prepubescent teenage boys pronouncing there new found love to there 2 week old girlfriends to spite his friends.It can also be vice versa, ya know...thats high school for you.In fact I might add that line in there.