That's some good writing. Fill it in with dialogue between the characters and it will really come to life.

EXAMPLE

"holy mother of god, He's got an axe," she screamed.

"So, what you want me to do about it?" he replied.

you can write a book
Roadking Reviewed by Roadking on . my story read my story.i know its a bit long but bare with me.tell me what ya think. "The Hunting" Late afternoon.Beginning of summer 1975.The sunshine is blinding.A couple is lying down kissing on a blanket on a grassy hill. A castle sits in the background.The WOMAN takes off her shirt feeling that the spot is secluded enough to do so.The MAN smiles and begins to kiss her chest.The sound of a twig snapping catches the woman's attention.She tells the man that she heard something but he Rating: 5