Quote Originally Posted by P.E.N.G.U.I.N.
BUT IT STILL NEEDS SOME MORE! IM 15 FOR CHRISSAKES! HELP ME!
I find it extremely ironic that you clearly want advice, yet you ward off the only 2 posters who gave you any sort of criticism. I was under the impression that posting your paper here was so you could get some feedback, and it seems that anything short of praise, you deny. I wanted to help you out, but it seems you'd rather ignore the problems.


Oh, and one more thing...
Quote Originally Posted by P.E.N.G.U.I.N.
and plaguirism is only a problem if i take things word for word.
No, stupid, taking another person's ideas and text and rewording it is called paraphrasing.
zooted999 Reviewed by zooted999 on . First Draft Here it is. My First Draft in all of its Glory and Splendor. read! Marijuana By Jake Martinez In our society there are many forms of Crime. From the Speeder caught unawares while he was simply dozing off on a long, boring drive, to the Mass Murderer sitting in his basement killing small animals in some sort of Sadistic Ritual. Most of our Laws in this glorious United States of America have been made with the good of the people in mind. Some of them, however, arenâ??t so Justly Rating: 5