First Draft

[P.E.N.G.U.I.N.]

that's too radical. let's be a little near-sighted. first we create a buzz by EVERYONE distributing it, then we go in for the kill with more facts. maybe even turn it into a newsletter type thing? there's great potential here. let's focus on the first hit though, eh?

[TheAtomicPunk]

Hells yea. sounds good to me. But first, MASS PRODUCTION!

[P.E.N.G.U.I.N.]

is there anyone besides me, fan o kmk, and theatomicpunk that are mass producing this!?

[TheAtomicPunk]

i dont know, SPREAD THAT WORD!!! im bringin this shit to kinkos man!

[P.E.N.G.U.I.N.]

i dont know, SPREAD THAT WORD!!! im bringin this shit to kinkos man!

and that's why i love you

[TheAtomicPunk]

haha thanks man. Well, i'll probabley bring it to ACE hardware because its closer. lol i really do love ace hardware

[zooted999]

BUT IT STILL NEEDS SOME MORE! IM 15 FOR CHRISSAKES! HELP ME!

I find it extremely ironic that you clearly want advice, yet you ward off the only 2 posters who gave you any sort of criticism. I was under the impression that posting your paper here was so you could get some feedback, and it seems that anything short of praise, you deny. I wanted to help you out, but it seems you'd rather ignore the problems.


Oh, and one more thing...

and plaguirism is only a problem if i take things word for word.

No, stupid, taking another person's ideas and text and rewording it is called paraphrasing.

[TheAtomicPunk]

We already finished it, i already printed 20 copies man.
paraphrasing isnt illegal, just plaguirism.
So you can critize us, but the paper is over. Please, help us print out!

[P.E.N.G.U.I.N.]

it's on here...if you want to change it...you have my permission. and if i honestly don't know exactly where all the information came from since it's been in my head for so damn long...it's not copying anyone's work. zooted, change it, make it your own, i don't give a fuck. just leave me and my flock the fuck alone. if you think it needs work, go ahead great one i don't care i denied copyright protection so take it and tune it all you want. and if you really make a better paper, print it yourself. go on, do it.

[Void]

Good essay to spite your friends and yourself for however long it took to write.But to be honest it will not change shit in the process of legalizing marijuana.