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[StarcommanderX]

Sorry for those whom i offend with my writing, because I mean to.

I write my crazy stories because 1. I enjoy it 2. I hope to get feedback from people who's opinions matter to me because I usually write these in a stoned state (I smoke almost everyday) and it think the opinions of fellow stoners is something of value 3. There might be a slight chance that some might notice me, yes! even on these cannabis boards. ive found that a lot of the time people know people, even people youd never expect.

I am 19 and a finishing freshman in college. And for all you haters, you guys just wait! I will be famous!! Ive got connections! (my uncle wrote the script for 2 episodes of THomas the train but he got fired for spooging in his boss' coffee)

THis short story is about...nothing much to be quite honest. its all free-writing and improvising.

*ahem*

I was dying. I could smell it. The aroma of my blood, filling my nostils, swirling around my brain. Flies began to swarm around me, picking at my exposed intestines and torn flesh. I lifted up my right hand to check what the time was..but it was missing....my right hand that is. I had been run over...by a car...a beige 1978 cadillac seville to be exact. I tried to replay what happened in my mind, but i was in too much pain. I waited and searched for the blaring of sirens, rushing to save me...but they never came. I had to get up, I had to do something, I had to save myself...whip out some of those moves I had seen on ER. Slowly, but surely, I propped myself up on my elbows...only to find my legs severed at the mid-thigh....some auto accident. I coughed...blood...lots of it. Then my situation slowly came into focus...and it wasn't good. I was in a field...a grassy field...surrounded by miles and miles of grass...and not the kind you smoke...the kind you find on your front lawn. my car was gone...my hands were gone...my legs were gone...and soon my life would be to. The sun beat down on me, the heat only increased the pain, and the humidity.....was making me sweat...like a dog...in heat.
Ive been in some bad situations, but this one was climbing the charts to becoming the worst. The heat..the pain..they were beating me...hard...with a steel rod. and it hurt. bad. I felt myself slowly fading away....my elbows giving way...like a bridge being demolished...I fell on the soft grass. This was it, I was going to die. I was about to breath my last breath of air when I saw him out of the corner of my eye...the fuzzy figure of a man about two hundred meters away. but i'll never know who it was. because I was already dead.


To be continued...maybe.

StarcommanderX Reviewed by StarcommanderX on 05-03-2005. story Sorry for those whom i offend with my writing, because I mean to. I write my crazy stories because 1. I enjoy it 2. I hope to get feedback from people who's opinions matter to me because I usually write these in a stoned state (I smoke almost everyday) and it think the opinions of fellow stoners is something of value 3. There might be a slight chance that some might notice me, yes! even on these cannabis boards. ive found that a lot of the time people know people, even people youd never Rating: 5

[Looker]

You rule starcommander

[Encatuse]

Be careful. It would be an annoyance to see you get banned, but if you protest something for getting you in trouble by doing it again, odds are you'll just get in more trouble.

Protest the old fashioned way. Drink yourself stupid and start shooting.

Both of your stories have been enjoyable reads.

[StarcommanderX]

Be careful. It would be an annoyance to see you get banned, but if you protest something for getting you in trouble by doing it again, odds are you'll just get in more trouble.

Protest the old fashioned way. Drink yourself stupid and start shooting.

Both of your stories have been enjoyable reads.

^ i guess thats the adult way to handle it. and its about time to grow up. ill sneak into my parent's liquior cabinet later on in the day.

[StarcommanderX]

this a drawing i made for my new comic!

[OreO]

crazy story...that would suck if that really happened o ya and the drawing,....ITS VICIOUS!

[Reefer Rogue]

Star i love all your threads and posts, you crack me up everytime That's a really cool drawing for your comic too.

[Kid Dynamite]

Ive been in some bad situations, but this one was climbing the charts to becoming the worst.

haha that line made me crack up.

[Dark Seraph]

Starcommander, you seem really cool...I wish i lived in houston so we could smoke a few bowl. I dont know why i cant run into people like this on campus...it sux cuz i never lived in the dorms (i commute 20 minutes to school) and so i never really got into the university scene...which im probably gonna regret later, cuz everyone tell you how "the college years are the best." anyway, enough griping. Your story was sweet and i love the drawing.

[Encatuse]

Wow. That drawing makes my eyes fall out. I really enjoy art like that. I don't know if you've ever seen www.vomitus.com but that's what your drawing kind of reminded me of.

So what's your comic going to be about?