Quote Originally Posted by dragonrider
It seems like you are asseting several different facts, and each one will need to be backed up in the paper. For example, there are these assertions:

  1. Americans are being exploited and taken advantage of.
  2. People are climbing the rungs of the society in a perverse, irresponsible, and oblivious fashion.
  3. Morals and ethics are giving way to Social Darwinism.
  4. Criminals are not being held accountable.


Are you going to cover all of these or are they leading to a central premise? I would try to lead to the central premise, and get that central premise in the first pararaph. In one sentence, what is the paper about? That is your premise. And if it is about "wilding," then I would try to get that term in there in this opening paragraph too.

I think maybe the first sentence is a bit vague, and I was not exaclty sure what it meant.

Good luck!
actually, the paper is about what Charles Derber refers to as 'wilding', which is in its simplest definition 'individualism run amok'. It will be properly defined in the second paragraph and further exposed and disected throughout the paper. wait and see, everything you listed will be adressed properly.

EDIT..yes, most likely the paper will be based on a central premise, being 'wilding in america'. All the issues you bring up will correlate into one definition of how wilding is basically killing the america dream.