lyrics i just wrote, need criticism!

[yoda]

for a slow ballad style, i think that would work really well

"smoke danced around the ember of my cigarette, our eyes met and they havent left yet"

my favorite line

yoda Reviewed by yoda on 10-01-2007. lyrics i just wrote, need criticism! okay so i havent gotten down a melody or even a chord progression, but i started writing and this is what came out so any feedback would be awesome! ---------------------------------------------------------------- i looked into your eyes and found songs worth singing i looked into your soul and found no reason for leaving your hand brushed mine and my heart felt like swinging smoke danced around the ember of my cigarette, our eyes met and they havent left yet... i saw a world full of Rating: 5