Quote Originally Posted by khronik
I'm not trying to bash you or your efforts, mind you, I'm just offering some constructive criticism. For instance, I think this essay needs to be shorter and better organized. It could also help if you caught the reader's attention with something at the beginning. As it is, it's kind of hard to follow.

I too, think marijuana is relatively harmless and may as well be legalized.

I've got to be honest with you here. This document may have promise, but right now it has a lot of problems.

1) you're saying mostly stuff that is pretty well-known already
For instance, we all know marijuana is a plant and alcohol is a liquid.

2) this is not a very compelling read
You have a lot of run-on sentences, and it's hard to determine what points you're trying to make without a fair amount of effort. In today's society, we are inundated with so much media, that something that isn't well-produced is easy to ignore.

3) there are a lot of errors and grammar problems
For instance, "marijuana", "legalization", and "alcohol" are not supposed to be capitalized.
I will consider your critiques, I will try to beef it up before I file my case, I hope this community will help me win the case!! I plan on filing the case soon.

JD1stTimer,
I agree, I think the holy people need to wake up from the blind and lazy loyalty they have, we need to question everything.

youaintknow,
I agree, a lot of people need to wake the fuck up and stop acting like sheeple always looking to lead instead of leading themselves.