It's getting there. I think lines six and seven are the main problem. Other than that I really like this poem. Keep up the good work.:jointsmile:
GreenLadyOfDankDowns Reviewed by GreenLadyOfDankDowns on . The American Dream Revisited I wrote this today. Let me know what you think. The American Dream Revisited Everyday a kid gets his fix, Two pills from the doctor takes away his twitch. Tweak for the children, Trips for the tired, Weed for the lucky, And Smack for the dieing. They hook all them up, Rating: 5