Inspired

Wasup ladies and gentz, i wrote somethin ide like ta post,its about me havin to leave all my friends and my life, den i read kronic_bagz's still alive post and got some inspiration, kronics a mad rhymer wit soul, heres to you bro

Like a joke that is'nt funny
Like a day that is'nt sunny
Like a rich man with no money
I hate it all so much hunny
My life twisted, turned and altered
I'm hanging with the faultered
Wish i could go back
But its a nasty fact
That you cant go back
Nothing ever goes according to plan
I got my hand, balled in a fist
I'm gettin back up, im ready to fight
My hearts gettin dark and cold like a winter night
I want someone to be there
To hold my hand
To whsiper in my head "its ok man"
But i'm off again
No one gonna be der eva again
No one, with my hand
Here i am, ma bran new land

It aint great, i wrote at 1:07 am and im pretty fucked up, if you guys like it ill post some more well thought out work, lemme noe wat u think good or bad

dat was good bro. anything u can feel in ur soul, if u can put it in a rhyme a lot of people can see what ur saying clearly.


but yea bro, that was good

that was kick ass kyle keep it commin babe ;)

yah rite on buddy.

haha trip, ill post some more on this thread a lil later, gotta do some of that sh*tty homework first, oh yeah dont i love it, map of canada, for like the tenth year inna row...

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Originally Posted by kyle

Wasup ladies and gentz, i wrote somethin ide like ta post,its about me havin to leave all my friends and my life, den i read kronic_bagz's still alive post and got some inspiration, kronics a mad rhymer wit soul, heres to you bro

Like a joke that is'nt funny
Like a day that is'nt sunny
Like a rich man with no money
I hate it all so much hunny
My life twisted, turned and altered
I'm hanging with the faultered
Wish i could go back
But its a nasty fact
That you cant go back
Nothing ever goes according to plan
I got my hand, balled in a fist
I'm gettin back up, im ready to fight
My hearts gettin dark and cold like a winter night
I want someone to be there
To hold my hand
To whsiper in my head "its ok man"
But i'm off again
No one gonna be der eva again
No one, with my hand
Here i am, ma bran new land

It aint great, i wrote at 1:07 am and im pretty fucked up, if you guys like it ill post some more well thought out work, lemme noe wat u think good or bad

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Ya, wicked man. Look forward to hearing some more.

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Originally Posted by Islander

Ya, wicked man. Look forward to hearing some more.

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Amen to that Kyle!!! keep it commin :rolleyes:

good job sweety :D

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Originally Posted by kyle

Wasup ladies and gentz, i wrote somethin ide like ta post,its about me havin to leave all my friends and my life, den i read kronic_bagz's still alive post and got some inspiration, kronics a mad rhymer wit soul, heres to you bro

Like a joke that is'nt funny
Like a day that is'nt sunny
Like a rich man with no money
I hate it all so much hunny
My life twisted, turned and altered
I'm hanging with the faultered
Wish i could go back
But its a nasty fact
That you cant go back
Nothing ever goes according to plan
I got my hand, balled in a fist
I'm gettin back up, im ready to fight
My hearts gettin dark and cold like a winter night
I want someone to be there
To hold my hand
To whsiper in my head "its ok man"
But i'm off again
No one gonna be der eva again
No one, with my hand
Here i am, ma bran new land

It aint great, i wrote at 1:07 am and im pretty fucked up, if you guys like it ill post some more well thought out work, lemme noe wat u think good or bad

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Nice man ,,,,sweet as a nut

Peace

everyone loves peotry thats awesome.

"everyone loves peotry thats awesome."

K quitre frankly i dont,

evyerones bitching about the same shit, over and over again
Get a life
Find sum real strife,
You attention craving nut
get a gut,
Why the fuck do you care
Get everone to stare,
At your post
Your fucking post
Stop being so weak,
You apper to me soo meek

Yes i know i cant spell,
Fuck you
And go to hell.

No I'm not really a hater
More of a masterbater.
But this lame rhyming,
is at it's timing.

This must end,
A real topic is to what we must tend.
Go to rapperforum.com
or diplsy to me a bong,
but end this ceaseless shit
or instead it'lll be your face that i hit.

But it seems to be what ppl are posting about so w/e

I dont really care, it's fun to read,
especailly wiht sum mead.
I didnt mean to offend
it's my pateince i should mend.

Now to distractfro me getting sum of my own medicine,

Who likes K-OS?

yo c, if u aint gonna nothing nice to say about my piece shutup and dont say nething at all, if it werent for the mods this would be alot nastier, so gettta fucking life yah prick

Hey, as an "artist" shouldnt u be open to critisism of all sorts,
And for telling me to "shut up" for not beign positive is a contradiction in it'sself.

Hippocrites are a terrrible breed.

that wasent critisizm, u did not say nething about telling me wats wrong or good about my piece, u said that u dident want poetry around u wanted a different thread, im open to critisizm but that wasent it, so by all means start a different thread about w.e u like, and u just came in here to say u dident like poetry, so if u dont like it dont come to the thread
Peace

that wasent critisizm - "evyerones bitching about the same shit, over and over again "
- "You attention craving nut " I was critiquing the fact that ou just doing the same thign as evyeorn esle, not orignial, just bithcing and w/e. And B, that it seem oyu have no real point,a nd u only seem to want attetnion, why esle post a poem without any climax or real point.

So your wrogn there.

u said that u dident want poetry around u wanted a different thread.,

No i saimd im getting tierd of the same old shit, not that i enver wanna see poems out here, but rather that i just think t's about tiem we started posting sum real shite. Not that we shoudl just stop posting ryhms alltogher jsut get sum mroe variety.
Wrong again.

And yes i said i didnt like peotry, but i came on here in hopes that ,mabe thier will be sum actualll conversation goiong on, and their is! :)

Peace.

first of all, im free to bitch and complain if i want in my poems, because i write them, and if you think everyone is doing this for attention and that everyones is the same that you should read more caefully every one has a differnet meaning in wat they write u just need to understand it, and u seem to like bitching and complaining so try and do it somewhee else :)
and bro another thing, if u tired of the same ol' shit that u write something, and as for im an attention craving nut, wtf is attention gonna do me on a website with like 5000 ppl, like a give a shit, so dude take ur bitching somewhere else, cuz no one asked you to read my poems
So in the wya u put it, wrong again.
Peace

I neve said everone. I jsut said you.

Your first point again is wrong.

Why shoudl i bitcha nd complain sumwhewre esle if u dont.

Geeze enuff with the hipocracy.
MAn if ur gonna be such a hippocrite, go join the bush administration or sumthing.

I know i come here to rant and rave and bitch and whinge.
Get over it kyle. I reckon it was a shit poem but it doesnt mean i think your effort wasnt great and that im someone to listen too or that I dont want to read any more of em. i done a hundred worse ones.
You got a heap of good comments and one bad one, so what.
Now stop narcin to the mods and get writing more stuff u stooge.
Just put it out there and beleive in it, dont cry coz someone poo pooed it.

By the way, that dancin keyboard head guy is great. I got his album and its very cool. stupid, but cool.

first of all im not doing this for attention, i think ur sitting here bitching and complaining in some vain attempt to get urself some attention, and im not bitching and complaining i pointed out that i can if i do so feel the need to, and in calling me a hippocrate ur participating in hipocracy bro, so just piss off cuz this is getting old and i dont honestly care wat u have to say, so go and argue with someone else, and oohh the bush administration, ur tough arentcha
Peace

Yeah man.

Take it frmo the now labeld ass-hole.

Listen to Imotep.

U eever listen to Imhotep by "Iced earth"
REmind me of a 80's ong, all thier trakcs, fantacy based.

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Originally Posted by The C

Yeah man.

Take it frmo the now labeld ass-hole.

Listen to Imotep.

U eever listen to Imhotep by "Iced earth"
REmind me of a 80's ong, all thier trakcs, fantacy based.

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I ahve heard it yeah. ahwile ago tho.
hey kyles fragile man, leave him be.
lets go pick on torog, he's good sport. :D

dont let it get to u kyle, yr alright aye.

Torog? :confused:

texas fella with lots of guns. he's really cool. mostly in activism etc.

what a fag
i saw that poem in a book hahaLOSER

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Originally Posted by shiz507

what a fag
i saw that poem in a book hahaLOSER

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fucking moron!

lola..your a cunt
shut your face..you probably let your bush grow

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Originally Posted by shiz507

lola..your a cunt
shut your face..you probably let your bush grow

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lmfao hahahah u think what u say really matters to us lmao hahahaha :D :D
i think its funny and cute ;)

jub jub!!! w00t shiz your a lostsoul man. Where you born out of an asshole?

no a vagina

from what goddam animal mate?
the rare vagina foreheaded horses arse wallaby?

what? how lame was that?

lame enough to not be able to run.

ok now, it has gotten to the point
where we s top this thread
because he has gotten so gay, its unbarable to read

someone ban this little kid


kyle, dont worry that one person doesnt like your shit, ignore him.. even the best artists, musicians, writers or poets in the world arent liked by everyone :p

The C, just coz u dont like what kyles writin, doesnt mean you have to start an arguement.. give your opinion, yeah, but dont start a fight and tell him not to post it anymore, because some people, like me, enjoy reading it :)

and i say we ALL go start on torog!! lol :D

peace

all this poetry...













i love it...
i wanna hear some more guys...
c'mon... im not good at poetry so.........

peace