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man fuck iambic pentameter... it's all about iambic tetrameter. And yes, in my opinion, rhythm is the most important aspect of poetry, but then again, I am a drummer so that is to be expected. Rhyme comes second in importance.Quote:
Originally Posted by JaiPeur
The storm of time unleashes fast
Stiring up the episodes of the past
They come and fade and then restore
Making the world angry more
Whens comes the day when we can rest
Apon the shpere I love the best
The earth regrows to pristine heath
Then all life relaxs in its green house
The sands returned and growth restored
No more roads, or concreate floors
All beings equal and with no cash
To live and love and smoke the grass.
The darkness covers the busy day
The children sleep and stars do play
Peaceful silence again at last
Another day of life has past
In the moon light the shadows dance
Close your eyes and take a chance
Go to the land where life is free
The land in which the heart does see
A place of love with winds of joy
No more fear or being coy
We drift apon the clouds of hope
Showering the earth with rains to cope
With the rain the soil drinks
The sounds go quiet so minds can think
Of the way of years now past
Then with the sun the earth awakes atlast
Yay, finaly a few more people are posting. I like your poems karmaxul and growitandsmokeit , I'm very much down with nature and the earth so I think there great.
Catch a ride apon a star
To lands of myth which seem so far
Out from the roofs holding in the heat
Rising up above the streets
See the world spin beneath
Love fights pain and hits its peak
The old soldiers rise and mend the weak
Throwing off the battles of their defeats
But from the battles the hope still crys
To give up is the same as die
Reach now up and touch the sky
To win the war we first must try
From the ground it can be hard to see
The dreams and hopes of the time were free
Until that moment I see one way
To fight with love and face the day
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Fuck you then go to a different thread if you want to be that way we are just writing because we like it, it doesn't have to be perfect we are just amiture writers having fun.Quote:
Originally Posted by JaiPeur
Thanks tblueyes I just stumbled on this thread, great place to unwind the mind
Yo forget them just not having fun them self and wants company.
The devil rises and cuts off gods hands
For the damage done apon the land
Worship dies its painful death
So earths spirit at last can rest
The pentagram it turns by threes
Its self the circle shown to me
Connect the numbers of points in time
They continue forever far past this ryme
The days hours cut in two
What does earths code mean to you
A perfect balance which once was taught
Then destroyed and covered as powers crossed
War and hungery now plauge the land
Thats why god did loose his hands
Lets keep this thread apon the top
As creativity does grow our crops
When a viewer sees the poets place
They come and dance and share their grace
Imagination refreshes the soul
Then to the show room their hands do go
And from the seed we grow our moms
Then clone their daughter with in our palms
Feed them well and numbers flow
Then as a profession you now do grow
Rofl, that is great!Quote:
Originally Posted by karmaxul