Intro to my sociology midterm paper

Im writing a paper for my sociology mid term and it is on what is called 'wilding', a form of sociopathic and individualism run amok.

Tell me if I started my paper off on the right foot.



The Wilding of America - How greed and violence are eroding our nations character

As long as America has been growing into a mature and economically driven society, so has its people grown to form the fabric of 21st century idealism at its worst. Members of its society are finding themselves being exploited and taken advantage of in the work place, in the general public, and even in their own homes. People are now finding clever and creative ways to climb the rungs of the social caste system in a perverse, irresponsible, and oblivious fashion. Seasoned moral values and ethical â??ways of beingâ?? are now found lost in the ashes of the wake of a new era of Social Darwinism, and criminals are not being held accountable for the devastations they have sown in todayâ??s era of a free market.

I like it. The intro definitely intrigues me to want to continue. When your done you should send the whole thing. It's nice to see someone get into the psyche of political science. Gives you a different perspective. But don't take my words to heart because I'm really stoned and drunk right now :stoned:

Sounds like an interesting topic to me, forceful delivery which makes you want to read on to see how you have come to this conclusion. But you should probably get feedback from a sociologist/sociology prof lol, I don't really know the requirements for sociology essays in terms of citations etc.

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Originally Posted by Dream of the iris

I like it. The intro definitely intrigues me to want to continue. When your done you should send the whole thing. It's nice to see someone get into the psyche of political science. Gives you a different perspective. But don't take my words to heart because I'm really stoned and drunk right now :stoned:

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I'm sober, but like it also!

Just a formatting tip, don't put ways of being in quotations. Use hyphens instead, ways-of-being.

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Originally Posted by JohnnyZ

Just a formatting tip, don't put ways of being in quotations. Use hyphens instead, ways-of-being.

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thanks for the feedback! ill change that up in my final draft.

glad my papers off to a good start.

Word. You should post it up man, even before you send it in. I wouldn't mind editing it for you, I'm only taking two classes this term, both easy GPA boosters so I have lots of time on my hands.

It seems like you are asseting several different facts, and each one will need to be backed up in the paper. For example, there are these assertions:

1. Americans are being exploited and taken advantage of.
   
2. People are climbing the rungs of the society in a perverse, irresponsible, and oblivious fashion.
   
3. Morals and ethics are giving way to Social Darwinism.
   
4. Criminals are not being held accountable.

Are you going to cover all of these or are they leading to a central premise? I would try to lead to the central premise, and get that central premise in the first pararaph. In one sentence, what is the paper about? That is your premise. And if it is about "wilding," then I would try to get that term in there in this opening paragraph too.

I think maybe the first sentence is a bit vague, and I was not exaclty sure what it meant.

Good luck!

Man... i liked it very much! I also think that you should post your entire work here when it were finished... Me, and im sure a lot of people also, would like very much to read it entire. :thumbsup:

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Originally Posted by dragonrider

It seems like you are asseting several different facts, and each one will need to be backed up in the paper. For example, there are these assertions:

1. Americans are being exploited and taken advantage of.
   
2. People are climbing the rungs of the society in a perverse, irresponsible, and oblivious fashion.
   
3. Morals and ethics are giving way to Social Darwinism.
   
4. Criminals are not being held accountable.

Are you going to cover all of these or are they leading to a central premise? I would try to lead to the central premise, and get that central premise in the first pararaph. In one sentence, what is the paper about? That is your premise. And if it is about "wilding," then I would try to get that term in there in this opening paragraph too.

I think maybe the first sentence is a bit vague, and I was not exaclty sure what it meant.

Good luck!

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actually, the paper is about what Charles Derber refers to as 'wilding', which is in its simplest definition 'individualism run amok'. It will be properly defined in the second paragraph and further exposed and disected throughout the paper. wait and see, everything you listed will be adressed properly.

EDIT..yes, most likely the paper will be based on a central premise, being 'wilding in america'. All the issues you bring up will correlate into one definition of how wilding is basically killing the america dream.