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I wrote a book/document called:
why marijuana should be legal, I basically talk numbers, as in money and point out the obvious logical stuff not many people have mentioned such as a side by side comparison to alcohol
go to the following link to read or listen to the book:
Why Marijuana should be Legal
any feedback would be much appreciated!
peace,
timedrifter
come on now, not one reply??:wtf:Quote:
Originally Posted by timedrifter
I am sitting here thinking I am on the verge of something big and people are passing this thread up!!
my fuckin book is gonna legalize weed, you'll see!:wtf:
I'm gonna go read it
cool!, tell me what you think!!
Well thought out, however with the negative view towards MJ due to ignorance, I have yet to wonder when America will see the light.
Spread the word.
I've got to be honest with you here. This document may have promise, but right now it has a lot of problems.
1) you're saying mostly stuff that is pretty well-known already
For instance, we all know marijuana is a plant and alcohol is a liquid.
2) this is not a very compelling read
You have a lot of run-on sentences, and it's hard to determine what points you're trying to make without a fair amount of effort. In today's society, we are inundated with so much media, that something that isn't well-produced is easy to ignore.
3) there are a lot of errors and grammar problems
For instance, "marijuana", "legalization", and "alcohol" are not supposed to be capitalized.
I'm not trying to bash you or your efforts, mind you, I'm just offering some constructive criticism. For instance, I think this essay needs to be shorter and better organized. It could also help if you caught the reader's attention with something at the beginning. As it is, it's kind of hard to follow.
I too, think marijuana is relatively harmless and may as well be legalized.
Yeah, it needs some serious editing is all. And there was a section of just tables of numbers that I completely skipped over. I like the Biblical section though, especially since such a large percentage of prohibitionists are Bible-thumpers it might help them see the light.
I will consider your critiques, I will try to beef it up before I file my case, I hope this community will help me win the case!! I plan on filing the case soon.Quote:
Originally Posted by khronik
JD1stTimer,
I agree, I think the holy people need to wake up from the blind and lazy loyalty they have, we need to question everything.
youaintknow,
I agree, a lot of people need to wake the fuck up and stop acting like sheeple always looking to lead instead of leading themselves.
I am really high right now. I just saw that commercial before I entered this thread again and I freaked out.Quote:
Originally Posted by timedrifter