Islander
09-08-2004, 09:08 AM
Just wrote this, let me know what you think. It's a little bit long.
FADE IN.
INT. BRUCE/JIMā??S HOUSE - DAY
BRUCE and JIM are sitting at a couch arguing, Bruce has trouble cracking a walnut with a nutcracker, so he grabs a hammer and smashes it open.
BRUCE
No way man, not someone that close to here. The last one was from only a couple blocks from here.
JIM
Bruce, come now, that means nothing. Tons of people live around here. They have nothing on us.
BRUCE
(pouting)
Fine. But Iā??ll only make a move on her if I can catch her alone.
JIM
Sounds good, now, go work your magic. Sheā??s done work in about ten minutes.
EXT. JENNā??S WORK - DAY
Bruce bumps into JENN knocking her papers all over. They both start scrambling to pick them all up.
BRUCE
Oh no, Iā??m so sorry, let me help you.
JENN
(smiles at him)
Thanks, not your fault though. Iā??m always a klutz.
BRUCE
No no, that was my fault. I feel bad.
(smiles at her)
Can I make it up to you somehow?
JENN
(confused)
Thatā??s really unnecessary, donā??t worry about it.
BRUCE
No no, itā??d be my pleasure. Sorry if Iā??m to bold here, but I donā??t get to bump into someone as beautiful as you everyday.
(big smile and a wink)
JENN
(smiles back)
I, I donā??t think so.
BRUCE
How about I rent a movie and bring over some take out?
JENN
Youā??re persistent arenā??t you? I donā??t go out with guys that walk into me on the street.
BRUCE
You said you bumped into me.
(winks)
My nameā??s Mike by the way, whatā??s yours?
JENN
Jenn. So say for just a second, I decide to watch a movie with you tonight, how do I know youā??re not going to just rob me blind the second I turn my back on you?
BRUCE
Weā??ll watch it at my place?
JENN
How do I know youā??re not some psycho murderer or something?
BRUCE
(laughs, smiles at her again)
Come on now, do I really look the type? What do you say? What time should I pick you up? Iā??ll even make you supper.
JENN
(thinks for a few seconds)
Eight, but donā??t be late, or I wonā??t come with you.
BRUCE
Itā??s a date, where do I pick you up?
JENN
Here, Iā??ll write some directions for you.
She scribbles her address on the back of a receipt and hands it over. They exchange smiles and walk their separate ways.
INT. BRUCE/JIMā??S HOUSE - EVENING
Bruce and Jenn walk into the house together. Bruce takes her coat.
BRUCE
Have a seat. How does pizza sound?
JENN
Sounds good.
BRUCE
Good,
(winks)
Iā??ve allready started making it. Be back in a jiffy, make yourself comfy.
Jenn takes a seat on the couch. Bruce comes back into the room, holding a knife, walking towards Jenn. Gets within a few steps when she turns around. She jumps and has a look of shock.
JENN
Oh my god! You scared the crap out of me Mike!
BRUCE
Huh? Oh, oh. Iā??m sorry, I was just seeing if you wanted some peppers on your pizza. I never meant to...
JENN
Well you did.
(laughs)
Youā??re lucky I didnā??t pee myself. Ya sure, peppers sound good.
Bruce walks back out.
INT. BRUCE/JIMā??S HOUSE, OTHER ROOM - EVENING
Jim is sitting there waiting. The two have a heated argument while trying to stay quiet.
BRUCE
I canā??t do it man, I just donā??t have the guts.
JIM
Jesus Christ. Iā??ll do it again then. You really need to grow a pair you know?
Jim grabs the knife and heads back to the living-room. To his surprise, thereā??s no one there.
JIM (CONTā??D)
(calls to next room)
What the hell man? Sheā??s gone.
BRUCE
Oh shit! You donā??t think she overheard us do you?
JIM
Where else would she have gone?
BRUCE
I donā??t know... I donā??t want to go to jail man.
JIM
Me neither. Maybe she stepped out for some fresh air?
BRUCE
Maybe sheā??s at the cops right now?
JIM
Forget this, I am not going in, you hear me? Iā??d rather be dead!
BRUCE
Me too, lets do it then.
JIM
What?
BRUCE
Kill each other, lets do it quick before the cops arrive. Iā??ll kill you then after Iā??ll kill myself.
JIM
If you can stomach it, do it.
Bruce grabs the knife and without much hesitation, kills Jim. After Jim falls to the ground, Bruce looks around, then holds the knife to his neck, then cuts. He falls to the floor. We hear a toilet FLUSH.
JENN (O.S.)
Mike! Is someone here? I heard talking?
Jenn walks into the room and sees the two dead bodies. She freezes for a second, then puts her hand over her mouth in shock. She puts her hand back down and walks to the door. Sheā??s about to walk out when she takes a look back, still in shock.
JENN (CONTā??D)
(shakes her head)
Iā??ve got the worst luck with men.
FADE OUT.
FADE IN.
INT. BRUCE/JIMā??S HOUSE - DAY
BRUCE and JIM are sitting at a couch arguing, Bruce has trouble cracking a walnut with a nutcracker, so he grabs a hammer and smashes it open.
BRUCE
No way man, not someone that close to here. The last one was from only a couple blocks from here.
JIM
Bruce, come now, that means nothing. Tons of people live around here. They have nothing on us.
BRUCE
(pouting)
Fine. But Iā??ll only make a move on her if I can catch her alone.
JIM
Sounds good, now, go work your magic. Sheā??s done work in about ten minutes.
EXT. JENNā??S WORK - DAY
Bruce bumps into JENN knocking her papers all over. They both start scrambling to pick them all up.
BRUCE
Oh no, Iā??m so sorry, let me help you.
JENN
(smiles at him)
Thanks, not your fault though. Iā??m always a klutz.
BRUCE
No no, that was my fault. I feel bad.
(smiles at her)
Can I make it up to you somehow?
JENN
(confused)
Thatā??s really unnecessary, donā??t worry about it.
BRUCE
No no, itā??d be my pleasure. Sorry if Iā??m to bold here, but I donā??t get to bump into someone as beautiful as you everyday.
(big smile and a wink)
JENN
(smiles back)
I, I donā??t think so.
BRUCE
How about I rent a movie and bring over some take out?
JENN
Youā??re persistent arenā??t you? I donā??t go out with guys that walk into me on the street.
BRUCE
You said you bumped into me.
(winks)
My nameā??s Mike by the way, whatā??s yours?
JENN
Jenn. So say for just a second, I decide to watch a movie with you tonight, how do I know youā??re not going to just rob me blind the second I turn my back on you?
BRUCE
Weā??ll watch it at my place?
JENN
How do I know youā??re not some psycho murderer or something?
BRUCE
(laughs, smiles at her again)
Come on now, do I really look the type? What do you say? What time should I pick you up? Iā??ll even make you supper.
JENN
(thinks for a few seconds)
Eight, but donā??t be late, or I wonā??t come with you.
BRUCE
Itā??s a date, where do I pick you up?
JENN
Here, Iā??ll write some directions for you.
She scribbles her address on the back of a receipt and hands it over. They exchange smiles and walk their separate ways.
INT. BRUCE/JIMā??S HOUSE - EVENING
Bruce and Jenn walk into the house together. Bruce takes her coat.
BRUCE
Have a seat. How does pizza sound?
JENN
Sounds good.
BRUCE
Good,
(winks)
Iā??ve allready started making it. Be back in a jiffy, make yourself comfy.
Jenn takes a seat on the couch. Bruce comes back into the room, holding a knife, walking towards Jenn. Gets within a few steps when she turns around. She jumps and has a look of shock.
JENN
Oh my god! You scared the crap out of me Mike!
BRUCE
Huh? Oh, oh. Iā??m sorry, I was just seeing if you wanted some peppers on your pizza. I never meant to...
JENN
Well you did.
(laughs)
Youā??re lucky I didnā??t pee myself. Ya sure, peppers sound good.
Bruce walks back out.
INT. BRUCE/JIMā??S HOUSE, OTHER ROOM - EVENING
Jim is sitting there waiting. The two have a heated argument while trying to stay quiet.
BRUCE
I canā??t do it man, I just donā??t have the guts.
JIM
Jesus Christ. Iā??ll do it again then. You really need to grow a pair you know?
Jim grabs the knife and heads back to the living-room. To his surprise, thereā??s no one there.
JIM (CONTā??D)
(calls to next room)
What the hell man? Sheā??s gone.
BRUCE
Oh shit! You donā??t think she overheard us do you?
JIM
Where else would she have gone?
BRUCE
I donā??t know... I donā??t want to go to jail man.
JIM
Me neither. Maybe she stepped out for some fresh air?
BRUCE
Maybe sheā??s at the cops right now?
JIM
Forget this, I am not going in, you hear me? Iā??d rather be dead!
BRUCE
Me too, lets do it then.
JIM
What?
BRUCE
Kill each other, lets do it quick before the cops arrive. Iā??ll kill you then after Iā??ll kill myself.
JIM
If you can stomach it, do it.
Bruce grabs the knife and without much hesitation, kills Jim. After Jim falls to the ground, Bruce looks around, then holds the knife to his neck, then cuts. He falls to the floor. We hear a toilet FLUSH.
JENN (O.S.)
Mike! Is someone here? I heard talking?
Jenn walks into the room and sees the two dead bodies. She freezes for a second, then puts her hand over her mouth in shock. She puts her hand back down and walks to the door. Sheā??s about to walk out when she takes a look back, still in shock.
JENN (CONTā??D)
(shakes her head)
Iā??ve got the worst luck with men.
FADE OUT.