please dont remember me for this (poem/lyrics)

[FactionGroove]

feeling ill
for the third day straight
top of a hill
begging to cure my viens
and i'm drinking, hiding
close to dying
i'm failing my phrasing
trying to stop complaining

you only love me when i'm sick
only believed in touching me
when we both thought i was dying

a bastard son, alone with a gun
wanting to shoot stars
a friendly shot of everything i've got
circling around the sun

all these pills
convince me your not real
i've had my fill
and i miss you

you've only loved me when i was sick
only gave up on finding me
as high as i was flying




i would like to give some meaning but i didn't know what you guys felt about it... i think it's more interesting with some background.

[beachguy in thongs]

Is it about a girl, who when you needed her, she let you down by not standing by you?

Because that's what I'm going through.

If you like what it means, then take it line by line, or stanza by stanza, add words, change them, experiment with it. It looks complete. It seems just like I said, about a girl not believing what you believe in and letting you down in the end.

[FactionGroove]

actually (for me) its about a character i made up for a screenplay i'm writing. he's a schitzo, suicidal, drug addict that has spent most of his life on medications to take away his dilliousions.

"you only love me when i'm sick" in the song version starts off the chorus. refering to being sick as time spent off of his meds. his dillousions of people being around him, and loving him.

the rest i've pretty much explained except for the last verse.
"all these pills..."
he's talking about not wanting to continue with the med's because he grew attatched to his dilliousions. he misses them.

but i welcome personal feelings about my writings and enjoy hearing peoples takes. it is complete... i just didn't know if anyone would want to know the original synopsis.

[beachguy in thongs]

Sex, drugs, and rock'n'roll. They go hand in hand.

[Caruso329]

actually (for me) its about a character i made up for a screenplay i'm writing. he's a schitzo, suicidal, drug addict that has spent most of his life on medications to take away his dilliousions.


You're writing a screenplay about me?! :o Awesome! ":cool:

[robert42]

isit herion?

[beachguy in thongs]

okay, f-f-t-b-a-c-i-t y-o-w a-w-a-c a-c-i-a y-o-a.

That's a little memory trick. It's so I can remember you for this (poem/lyric).

[CJD]

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[puffpuffand away]

its dumb

[pocketsrstillEmT]

Its not dumb...

I think its not bad at all. I had a battle with heroin addiction, and your words just about sum it up. Not bad at all.

[Nightwolf1772]

good i like it

[BabyFacedAbortion]

its dumb

You're rude.

I like it, it had a good flow and nice meaning as well. Good work

[halo]

This thread is over a year old!!!

[BabyFacedAbortion]

Woopsss. I never check dates!

[surreys princess]

so what if it is old? baby wanted to make a comment.....it is ok halo....old threads are still threads... :)

hi baby....hope you are good xx