honest oppinion

[koshea]

hey i write lyrics, i wrote this song in about 5-10 miniutes...i need to know if it is any good, it is for my band and we play mailnly modern indie rock, so tell me what you think and be honest

i gotta break out
before i break down
repetition never ending
your words flailing around
the pain fills the void
that plauges my heart
the pain fills my void
as soon as i start

its better to love a loser
than it is to lose a lover
your others not perfect
but theres no other
for you

im gonna break out
before i break down
hush your pretty lips
dont even think a sound
i love the pain
i feel inside
intense agony like
a dagger in my side


its better to love a loser
than it is to lose a lover
your others not perfect
but theres no other
for you

when shes all ive got
where do i turn to when shes not there
shes all ive got
where do i turn to
i turn to no where

[skissors]

I think it's pretty good, I'd like to hear your band if you could post a link to aclip or something. :)

[koshea]

we are in the process of getting a low budget demo cd made when we do ill gladly post it for you and everyone

[koshea]

other oppinions would be greatly appreciated...please

[EverydayJunglist]

not bad for being written in 10 minutes.Obviously you might wanna put more thought in to it before recording it,but not bad.However the lyrics sound like some shit you'd hear in a song by one of those whiney ass emo-bands.Hopefully,your band,is not a whiney ass emo band.....

[anycraic]

not bad for being written in 10 minutes.Obviously you might wanna put more thought in to it before recording it,but not bad.However the lyrics sound like some shit you'd hear in a song by one of those whiney ass emo-bands.Hopefully,your band,is not a whiney ass emo band.....
lol v.true